Posted on February 10, 2010, 5:19 pm

Thoughts please

Posted on February 11, 2010, 7:46 am
Last edited on February 11, 2010, 7:58 am

The opening sounds sweet and optimistic but that same riff goes on much too long, almost continuously through the track. More needs to be made of melody and particularly vocal harmony(which appears weakly but is good), particularly as the mood of the lyric is bleak.

When there is little vocal dynamic and not much melody there has to be a strong contrast between sections of the song to sustain interest. It's not really working that way for me at the moment.

Posted on February 11, 2010, 10:36 am

Sorry. I got bored about a minute in. Couldn't really get the point of it and it didn't have enough interest to sustain listening.